Writing Portfolio Sample

Description:
In Writing we got given a picture to write about. It was a picture of a cat in a cage and a bird sitting on top of it.We could chose who's point of view we could write from. I chose to write from my own point of view of about what happened, here is the picture of what we had to write about:

Image:

Big Idea:
In Rebecca's Writing group we have been learning all about ideas my goal specifically is to know who my audience is. I am also trying to impact my audience so that the audience understands what I am trying to get across in my writing. I tried to base my writing on the people around 8-12. Before we started writing we used this success criteria to help us:

• brainstormed precise nouns, descriptive adjectives to describe the image.
• used prompts such as what the character could see, hear, feel, hear.  
• used the mountain planning form to help us leave clues in our story.

Here is my Writing:

Evaluation:
I think that I used a range of short and long sentences to add impact to my story. But I think that I could have used a few more descriptive words. I liked using the new writing success criteria as I could keep looking back while I was writing and check that my writing was up to standard.

Feed back / Feed forward: 

I think you did a great job with adding lots of detail to your story to add impact, good job. But I think next time you could have added more talking between the characters.

From Hannah P